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LoverofSmut's avatar

This is so bloody beautiful. A perfect bath read.

Sapphra's avatar

Thank you. It’s powerful to hear that this piece struck a deeper note.

BaerS's avatar

Depth of passion and authentic intimacy. A descriptive invitation for the reader to feel physically present.

Sapphra's avatar

Thank you for reading. I’m glad you enjoyed this poem.

Charlotte Veraine's avatar

Emotional edging, the holy and the carnal, this hits me deeply in a wonderful way. An exquisite piece of writing that brings to some powerful concepts into the physical realm 💜

Sapphra's avatar

Thank you so much. That kind of response reminds me why I write. To make something that moves through the body as much as thought. xx

Charlotte Veraine's avatar

Ahhhhhh good. Attunement to the physical, emotional and spiritual realms is everything. Literally, everything to me. You did that here, and it’s precious 💜

Silken Mouli's avatar

A lovely poem, as always.

I do find it funny how sometimes when you leave an unfinished piece alone for a while, it becomes so much easier to finish. I had a short story I hated and was convinced would be almost impossible to polish into something I would be happy with. Left it alone for six months, picked it up to give it one last chance and it just felt like a completely different piece that I could see the shape of at last.

Sapphra's avatar

Thank you. Yes, this did feel a lot easier to finish after it had been left to “marinade.” It’s great to hear the piece struck a deeper note.

ryan collison's avatar

that energetic heightening from sitting in incompletion is exquisite and you captured it so well.

Sapphra's avatar

Thank you. It’s good to know the work stirred something true in you.

Linda Blatnik's avatar

there is so much human on the plate to taste, touch,

devour. your poems fill that hunger. beautiful.

Sapphra's avatar

Thank you very much. When a piece's energy connects with someone, it feels like a personal victory. I appreciate you taking the time to read my poetry today.

Elijah Westin's avatar

Wow.. beautifully written.

Hot..

Riding that edge is the absolute best, because it makes the climax so much better

My favorite lines were

"hush becomes thunder.

i moan your name

as the rain washes away

our dirty secrets."

But honestly the whole thing was art. Well done..

Sapphra's avatar

Thank you for letting me know the piece stirred something in you. That connection is exactly what I write for.

Ryan Eland's avatar

‘my pulse races’